[Framers] [EXTERNAL] Grammar question

[Cheryl Magadieu]

"All" is superfluous; I would remove it.
I would also remove "before proceeding further"; it is assumed that the
user will perform this step before proceeding to the next one.

Revised sentence: Remove the covers from the supervisor and nodes.

As to whether the revision is "better," minimalists would say that content
is easier to read and understand when you streamline a sentence.

Cheryl

On Thu, Jul 16, 2020 at 12:56 PM Tom Beiswenger <
tom.beiswenger at emhartglass.com> wrote:

> I prefer "A". "Further," though, is redundant. If you are proceeding, it
> can be presumed that you are going further.
>
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> Which of the two sentences is better?  Is there a "better", or is it just
> a matter of personal preference?
>
> A. Remove all the covers from the supervisor and nodes before proceeding
> further.
>
> B. Remove the covers from the supervisor and all nodes before proceeding
> further.
>
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